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November 2nd, 2006


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01:07 pm - Inspiration invocation
Inspiration Invocation. Written at lunch, Thursday, November 2, 2006:
I reach deeply within myself;
   seeking, searching.
My eyes turn inward and see deep;
   seeking, searching.
My fingers reach out, feeling forth;
   seeking, searching.
My ears are open, listening;
   seeking, searching.
My nose sniffs for any sign here;
   seeking, searching.
My tongue tastes the sweet nectar now;
   seeking, searching.
Here it is, within me, calling;
   seeking, searching.
Here I am, to greet it, hold it;
   seeking, searching.
Here we are, together, tightly;
   holding, knowing.
Inspiration, I call to you;
   hold me, know me.

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Current Mood: calmcalm
Current Music: "Something So Feminine About a Mandolin", -JB

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From:(Anonymous)
Date:November 2nd, 2006 06:38 pm (UTC)
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Truly, deeply beautiful. I lack the gift of writing, but I am glad that you share yours.

-M
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From:chronarchy
Date:November 2nd, 2006 08:48 pm (UTC)
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It's not really that great. I wrote it as it came, and so this is first draft. I haven't had the chance to edit it at all yet, seeing as I got back from lunch, typed it in, and then went straight back to work.

But I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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From:singingwren
Date:November 2nd, 2006 08:33 pm (UTC)
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Not to be a grammar nazi, but "My eyes turn inward and see deep" should end in "see deeply." I mention this because the lack of an -ly is on some level jarring.

I like the ending.
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From:chronarchy
Date:November 2nd, 2006 08:42 pm (UTC)
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"It's poetry man, back off."
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From:singingwren
Date:November 2nd, 2006 09:25 pm (UTC)
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You wanna fight?

I'll show YOU inspiration, you pansy poet!!!
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From:chronarchy
Date:November 2nd, 2006 09:32 pm (UTC)
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heh. It's a quote from somewhere. I think the Reduced Shakespeare Company, actually. Or, possibly, Dr. Science.

I forget which.

But when I get around to attempting to revise this draft, I'll take your request for a change to an adverb under consideration.
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From:singingwren
Date:November 2nd, 2006 09:37 pm (UTC)
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*laughs* I am honoured.

Now you need to set this baby to music. ;)
From:gothicsquish
Date:November 3rd, 2006 06:31 am (UTC)
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I like this.
Is it avalible for ritual use?
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From:chronarchy
Date:November 3rd, 2006 01:41 pm (UTC)
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Of course!

Atributation isn't even necessary, but if you'd like to, you can indicate that it is "KopyLeft: Michael J Dangler, 2006" :)

Everything I write is KopyLeft.
From:gothicsquish
Date:November 3rd, 2006 02:21 pm (UTC)
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What is KopyLeft?
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From:chronarchy
Date:November 3rd, 2006 02:24 pm (UTC)
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It's the Discordian version of "All Rights Reversed"

Terribly useful :)
From:gothicsquish
Date:November 3rd, 2006 02:29 pm (UTC)
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aah, cool. :)
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From:romandruid
Date:November 6th, 2006 01:54 am (UTC)
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Kewl! I like the litany effect and how the litany changes once you reach your destination. I also like your use of the five senses. If you tighten up some of the language (particularly the nose line), you'll be in terrific shape!

Here's an idea... toy with it if you will: what if you could slightly change the litany right after "Here it is, within me, calling" to transition a bit more gradually to the "holding, knowing." It seems like you've already found what you seeking for the three "Here" lines, and I wondered why you were still seeking. Because you don't yet grasp it?

Reminiscent of the "Are we there yet" chant? Hmm... I think you've got a theme going, mebbe.

(I also had some unpleasant imagery occur at the thought of you reaching deeply within yourself with your sense of touch... thoughts of tentacles ran through my mind and made me shudder.)

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