October 14th, 2008
|04:41 pm - A new prayer: for obtaining an interviewed-for job|
Last weekend, my parents met Maggie's parents for the first time.
Huh, that looks like it might almost be important. You know, like serious and stuff. And I don't want to give it short shrift, but by the same token, something far more important is going on in my life right now. And, of course, that something is a prayer.
I've been working on this prayer for obtaining a new job. While I'm unhappy with the meter, the format, and a bunch of other things, I really enjoy the sentiment:
Obtaining a Job Interviewed For
When Lugh came to the gate, he was challenged:
"What art do you practice, what skill do you bring?"
Said Lugh, "A wright am I, a fixer of wheels."
"A fixer of wheels we have, we need you not."
Said Lugh, "A smith am I, a worker of steel."
"A worker of steel we have, we need you not."
Said Lugh, "A warrior am I, a champion famed."
"A champion famed we have, we need you not."
Said Lugh, "A harper am I, a singer of tunes."
"A singer of tunes we have, we need you not."
Said Lugh, "A hero am I, a man of great might."
"A man of great might we have, we need you not."
Said Lugh, "A wizard am I, a sorcerous man."
"A sorcerer we have, we need you not."
Said Lugh, "A leech am I, a knower of herbs."
"A knower of herbs we have, we need you not."
Said Lugh, "A bearer am I, who carries the cup."
"A cup bearer we have, we need you not."
Said Lugh, "A brazier I am, a worker of brass."
"A worker of brass we have, we need you not."
Said Lugh, "Is there one who knows every art you need,
One who is ideally fit for all things you want?"
Said the gatekeeper, "A man like that we have not,"
And he heralded Lugh to the king, and brought him inside.
Lugh of the long arm, many skilled and deeply talented,
Who interviewed at the door, and was granted the king's seat:
I raise my voice in praise to you and seek your favour.
Let it be known that none other can do what I can.
Let it be known that none other fits in this place.
Let it be known that none other has all my skills.
Let it be known that none other they have interviewed
is better able to do all the tasks that are required.
Lugh, shining god with the long arm,
This I pray to you.
Current Location: Southeast of Disorder
Current Mood: stressed
Current Music: "Buttermilk Grove", -JB
I like it.
I miss you!
You're missed here, too. I'm not even sure what city you're in now?
Cincinnati. :( *sigh*
what happens to your world when you almost hit rock bottom?
You realize that there's a lot less of a chance of going down, than of going up.
Alternatively, you can lie down, but if the bottom is rocky, is that really all that comfortable a way to spend the rest of your life?
Np. When/if I revise, I'll re-post. I imagine I'll shorten it up a bit, here and there.
Good, glad you like it :)
And, I'm going to use it if you don't mind?
Please do: all my work is designed to be used by others, should the mood strike them!
I love the sentiment, too, but I like most of it just the way it is.
*ahem* Well, I know druidkirk
and I will disagree on this until the cows come home, but I'm right, y'know. (*pffft*) Poetry doesn't have to rhyme or have meter. At all.
What you do have is structure, repetition, and pattern. If you want to continue to hone it, that's what I'd focus on. Examine its structure closely and do your best to make that structure as uniform as possible... as is appropriate, anyway. Sometimes, breaking away from a pattern in key spots draws emphasis to them.
I'm not sure I'd group the lines as you have; seems to me lines 3-20 are couplets, not quatrains.
And, um... grammatically, I think you should use "no other" in the penultimate stanza instead of "none other," which sounds doesn't roll off my tongue easily. The line that sounds really awkward is "Let it be known that none other they have interviewed..." Maybe you could play around with that a bit?
You poet, you. *pft*
It's not bad as is. . . I wouldn't have posted it if it really were. But I do think it could be a lot better.
I'm not looking to rhyme, actually. Just to make it flow a tad better.
The line-grouping was a last-minute change because it was too long for posting without a cut unless I clipped a couple of lines out. Originally, it was all couplets until the end.
I think you're right about "no other". I also go back and forth particularly over "we need you not." While I enjoy the finality of it, I'm not sure I like it in the entire scheme. I might also snip a couple of the couplets out. I just included all of them, but they don't all flow well. (And some aren't intuitively different anymore: what's the difference between a hero and a champion nowadays, for instance? Or the conceptual difference between a smith and a brazier?)
"Last weekend, my parents met Maggie's parents for the first time.
Huh, that looks like it might almost be important. You know, like serious and stuff."
Yeah, not letting that go. I think that is a big deal, and I am happy for you! I hope everything continues to go well for you. You two deserve it. :)
Maybe it's a big deal, but the prayer is a bigger deal, by far. . .
|Date:||October 15th, 2008 03:13 am (UTC)|| |
Oh man, I'm starting to look for teaching jobs--can't apply until I get my certification (which I can't get until my child abuse clearance form comes back), but school's done in a month, and by then I'll have to find a job. So what I'm saying is, your timing is impeccable.
"child abuse clearance form" sounds like something that would clear you to perform child abuse. . .
Glad the timing worked out well. I used your site as a source for locating the info on what Lugh said he was, btw :)
Nice in general. I see two problems with "none other they have interviewed". One, it breaks the meter :) but more importantly its a get out clause. Read fairy stories to see why get-out clauses are bad.
You don't want to be the best qualified candidate but loose out to the less qualified (but known quantity), internal candidate who was not interviewed, I suspect?
Point on that. I can fix that, I think for the next iteration.
Though I can't tell you how amusing that last question is in particular right now, at least not on LJ. Boy, I wish I could.
You are in my prayers - Copia has been petitioned for you! ;)
So I know this was posted several years ago, but I wanted to thank you for writing and posting it. I love the story of Lugh coming to Tara and your rendetition of it. I had mentally bookmarked it, looked it up and used it yesterday before my job interview with Teavana. I felt an immediate surge of power when it shifts from the narrative to addressing Lugh. I read it out loud in my car and walked in feeling confident. This confidence faded a bit as the interview went on and pointed questions were asked but I was able to make an impression with my talk of the virtue of hospitality and the ritual of tea. I got the job offer this morning this morning and accepted it right away. I'm going to be a "tea guru" and take guests on a "tea journey" and of course sell, sell, sell (I know don't have as strong a sales background as some people that were hired but I feel better about selling tea than offers to sell insurance to senior citizens ::shudder::). Anywho hope you are doing well and thanks! Lugh's getting a nice offering tonight ;)
Glad it was helpful! And congrats on the job offer!